Feedback for my Rough Cut

What was done well:
When being told the feedback fro my rough cut, something that all my peers agreed on was that my use of a panning shot, with split clips each holding a different colour, worked well with the tempo of the song at that moment.

Another part of my rough cut that my peers enjoyed was when we see the star of the video messing around with a hula-hoop. They're reasoning for liking this part in particular was that it showed a quirkier side of the video, as my bands genre is indie-pop, so they felt it showed the two contrasting genres.

Improvements:

My peers suggested that my video needed a larger variety of locations as it became quite repetitive throughout the video, and by having more locations it enables me to expand on the mis en scene. They also suggested that each different clip was made shorter as one shot would last too long and became long-winded for the audience to watch. I was told to play around with the editing to create more of a professional look to the video, this could be done by having a continuous edit on the same shots used throughout the video. 

Action:

To put this feedback into action my first move was to find more locations that would fit with my video and extend the mis-en-scene. I arranged more days for me and Charlie to get together to shoot in a number of different locations. When creating my final piece i also changed the effects on the video as they had suggested. Throughout the video, each clip in the cellar would hold the same effect, as would that of a scene in the woods. this made a smoother look to the piece and created a more professional looking product. The length of clips was also said to be an issue, so i trimmed down the clips so that they changed to different shots but kept in time with the beat of the song.

Rough cut

Shot List

Shot 1- Panning shot from wall moving onto Star in bed.
Shot 2- Shot of moving traffic sped up in time with music. Shows perspective of moving through the traffic.
Shot 3- Long shot of Star sitting up onto the end of her bed.
Shot 4- Long shot of Star sat on her bed however changed into different clothing.
Shot 5- Close-up on Stars face whilst lip-syncing.
Shot 6- Mid-shot of Star sat slouched on bed whilst lip-syncing.
Shot 7-Close-up on Stars face whilst lip-syncing.
Shot 8- Low angle shot of Star singing into camera.
Shot 9-Shot of moving traffic sped up in time with music. Shows perspective of moving through the traffic.
Shot 10- Low angle shot of Star looking away from camera lip-syncing.
Shot 11- Low angle shot of Star singing into camera.
Shot 12- Extreme close-up of Stars lips lip-syncing.
Shot 13-Low angle shot of Star singing into camera.
Shot 14-Shot of moving traffic sped up in time with music. Shows perspective of moving through the traffic.
Shot 15- Mid-shot of Star playing with hula-hoop.
Shot 16- Mid-Shot of Star in cellar lip-syncing. Far left of the camera.
Shot 17- Mid-shot of the Star in the cellar lip-syncing. Middle left of camera.
Shot 18- Mid-shot of Star in the cellar lip-syncing. Middle right of camera.
Shot 19- Mid-shot of Star in the cellar lip-syncing. Far right of camera.
Shot 20- Mid-shot of Star in cellar lip-syncing. Far left of camera.
Shot 21-Mid-shot of Star in cellar lip-syncing. Far left of camera. Over-lay of Star lip-syncing middle left of the camera.
Shot 22-Mid-shot of Star in cellar lip-syncing. Far left of camera.Over-lay of Star lip-syncing middle right of the camera.
Shot 23-Mid-shot of Star in cellar lip-syncing. Far left of camera. Over-lay of Star lip-syncing far right of the camera.
Shot 24-Low angle shot of Star singing into camera.
Shot 25-Shot of moving traffic sped up in time with music. Shows perspective of moving through the traffic.
Shot 26- Mid-shot of Star against dark brick wall lip-syncing and dancing. Far left of camera.
Shot 27- Mid-shot of Star in cellar lip-syncing and dancing. Middle left of camera.
Shot 28- Panning shot following Stars arm and moving across her body, up to her face and back down her other arm.
Shot 29-Low angle shot of Star singing into camera.
Shot 30-Mid-shot of Star in the cellar lip-syncing. Middle right of camera.
Shot 31-Mid-shot of the Star in the cellar lip-syncing. Middle left of camera.
Shot 32-Mid-shot of Star in the cellar lip-syncing. Far right of camera.
Shot 33- Mid-shot of Star playing with hula-hoop/
Shot 34-Shot of moving traffic sped up in time with music. Shows perspective of moving through the traffic.
Shot 35-Low angle shot of Star singing into camera.
Shot 36-Mid-shot of the Star in the cellar lip-syncing. Middle left of camera.
Shot 37-Mid-shot of Star against dark brick wall lip-syncing and dancing. Far left of camera.
Shot 38- Close-up of Star side profile lip-syncing.